My Holden Barina – Tercetonine
My Holden Barina rhymes with ballerina
I’d write a terza rima to my Barina
If only my muse would enthuse
An Aussie car is what I like
I’m so glad she’s not a bike
My mane will stay dry in the rain
She takes me from point A to B
Humming softly as a bumble-bee
Via alleyways and highways
To park her is a piece of cake
I can do it half awake
Into smallest space squeeze with ease
My Holden Barina rhymes with ballerina
For this little beauty here’s a rima piccolina
Not Dante’s terza, but a fine rhyme of mine
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P.S., I created this form on 18 May 2012 out of sheer frustration of not being able to master Dante’s terza rima, the challenge on Day 8 in Susan Budig’s Mindful Poetry Contest 2012. http://mindfulpoetry.gather.com/viewArticle.action?articleId=281474981863883 (This link is not valid any longer.)
My creation on that day follows these rules:
Each stanza has 3 lines ( tercet).
The first two lines rhyme.
The third line contains internal rhyme.
The rhyme pattern in this poem is as follows:
aa(bb) cc(dd) ee(ff) gg(hh) aa(jj) – internal rhyme shown in brackets
I had checked terza rima and tercet on Wikipedia where I did not find a form like the one I had created. (18 May 2012).
With Susan Budig’s help this form was subsequently named Tercetonine, a combination of ‘tercet’ and ‘leonine’ or internale rhyme (rhymes between a word within a line, often from a medial position and one at the end of the line). My creation featured as a challenge in the Mindful Poetry Contest 2013, when I also had the honour to be the judge for the day.
http://mindfulpoetry.gather.com/viewArticle.action?articleId=281474981863883 (This link is not valid any longer.)
I am for ever indebted to Susan, our most wonderful teacher, whose poetry and mentoring is appreciated by many. Encouraged by Susan to submit my poems for publication, this poem is among the poems published online and in print by Narrator Australia Volume Two.
Visit Susan’s Mindful Poetry blog at:
http://susanbudigs-poetry.blogspot.com.au/
© irina dimitric 2013
Perhaps some of you might like to try out this form. If you write a tercetonine, please let me know, I’d love to read it. And if you have any questions, don’t hesitate to ask.
Have a nice day! ~ Irina ~
Nice experiment with Words
Thank you. I’m glad you like it.
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Superb rima dear Irina!Back to the Australia Day … 🙂 xxx
Glad you like it, dear Doda. 🙂 xxx
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