In the Dark of the Night (SunWinks! 21 September 2014: Playing the Field)

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Silence

 

I can hear my own breathing

In the dark of the night

Thoughts dancing

the Eternal Dance

The dance of whys and ifs

in the whirligig

of my mind

Images of

Innocence

of  childhood joys

and

fears

A kind of longing

A longing to reach

the unreachable

Not knowing exactly what

yet longing for

the Rapture

Dreams

Sweet dreams

of Everlasting Happiness

Promised

at the end of

Each

Fairy Tale

 

Why have you betrayed me?

Why have you fed me lies?

 

Silence

 

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© Copyright 2014 Irina Dimitric

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About irinadim

Kookaburra sweet, you neither chirp nor tweet. Your laughter is much like mine, my cackle is much like thine. We are two sister souls, one clad in feathers, the other in clothes. ~ Irina ~ I’m a budding blogger. Poetry and photography are my newest passions, living in perfect harmony inspiring each other. I like both free verse and form poetry and am quite proud to let you know that I am the creator of a new form named ‘tercetonine’. Blog Name: Irina's Poetry Corner Blog URL: http://irinadim.com
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13 Responses to In the Dark of the Night (SunWinks! 21 September 2014: Playing the Field)

  1. Powerful stuff. I like the effect at “a longing to reach………..the unreachable.” The last two “why” lines really hit hard after the more leisurely pacing and spacing of the preceding. Well done.

    Looks like you had to use left and center alignment. In edit mode, try clicking the “toolbar toggle” button (far right) to reveal another row of tools including the increase and decrease indent buttons.

    • irinadim says:

      Oh Doug, I’m so pleased you’ve given your seal of approval for this poem. Thank you so much for your feedback.

      I clicked the toolbar toggle but it looked too complicated. I suppose I’ll try and experiment one day.

  2. slpsharon says:

    Truth is often elusive. Darkness can reveal or conceal.

  3. Aquileana says:

    Beautiful poem dear Irina.
    I liked the way you included poetic images related to the night, childhood memories and the past in a more general way .
    So lovely…. Many hugs and thanks for sharing, Aquileana 😛

  4. pambrittain says:

    Wonderful and picturesque, Irina. I actually did one that you commented on. Maybe it didn’t fit the challenges. At least I tried. You’re good at this poetry stuff, and I truly enjoy reading your posts.

    • irinadim says:

      Thank you, Pam. I don’t always meet the challenge either. The important thing is to have a go. Having said that, I don’t know whether I’ll have a go at the Parody challenge. 🙂 I think you’d be very good at that.
      I’m glad to hear you enjoy my posts.

      • pambrittain says:

        I’m almost afraid to try. Neither Len or Doug appear to appreciate my last response. The one that cracked you up. Perhaps they did show up and it was so bad, they quickly left. 🙂

      • irinadim says:

        Pam, I don’t think they’ve seen your response. Remind them to have a look. Doug missed one of mine, so I gently reminded him that I would appreciate his feedback. And he replied: “Oops, …” and gave me the feedback. He liked the poem but I didn’t meet the challenge. Don’t give up, Pam! 🙂

      • pambrittain says:

        Of course I won’t Irina. BTW they both showed up.

  5. irinadim says:

    Great! I knew they would and they both loved your poem. Congratulations, Pam!

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