Beauty and Vanity

P1000932  32 mod 1 email signed I did this drawing in my drawing class in 2011.

Beauty and Vanity – Cinquain

 

Beauty

And vanity

Vanish like vapour on

A hot day; winter wrinkles wink

And grin

 

© irina dimitric  2013

The original drawing is as large as this one.P1000932  32 mod 1 email signed

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About irinadim

Kookaburra sweet, you neither chirp nor tweet. Your laughter is much like mine, my cackle is much like thine. We are two sister souls, one clad in feathers, the other in clothes. ~ Irina ~ I’m a budding blogger. Poetry and photography are my newest passions, living in perfect harmony inspiring each other. I like both free verse and form poetry and am quite proud to let you know that I am the creator of a new form named ‘tercetonine’. Blog Name: Irina's Poetry Corner Blog URL: http://irinadim.com
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43 Responses to Beauty and Vanity

  1. afstewart says:

    A lovely poem, and a wonderful sketch.

  2. What a beautiful, melancholy poem and a brilliant drawing, Irina! 🙂

  3. Benita Kape says:

    A very talented lady. Could I make a tiny suggestion though. I found “winter’s wrinkles wink” a little difficult to get around my tongue so could it go –
    “wink, winter’s wrinkles,
    and grin”

    • irinadim says:

      Thanks, Benita, for your suggestion. Much appreciated.
      Originally I wrote “winter’s wrinkles grin
      and wink”.
      Then I thought how about more alliteration. I struggled with it for the same reason you just pointed out, but I wanted to convey that old age is winking at youth and grinning in derision – “You’ll be old one day too”. I like the flow of your version very much, but does it convey the meaning I intended? If it does, then I’ll change those lines.

    • irinadim says:

      Thanks, Benita, for your suggestion. Much appreciated. Originally I wrote “winter’s wrinkles grin and wink”. Then I thought how about more alliteration. I struggled with it for the same reason you just pointed out, but I wanted to convey that old age is winking at youth and grinning in derision – “You’ll be old one day too”. I like the flow of your version very much, but does it convey the meaning I intended? If it does, then I’ll change those lines.

      I posted this reply on my blog, but just want to make sure you get it, so here it is as well as I’m eager to know your opinion. Thank you so much again for offering your suggestion for improvement. I truly appreciate it.

      Cheers, Irina

  4. Benita Kape says:

    Maybe it’s the possessive that is not working. Because we know, simply with the use of the word winter, that is her in her aged self that is having the smile at life. That is the very strength of the poem imho. “winter wrinkles, wink
    and grin”

    How do you feel about that? I love it because it conveys the fact that the more one tries to cover up with cosmetics the worse it can get. Your poem suggests that this has been realised quite some time ago. I love that we can write of age without fear. I love your hearty confidence and self esteem manifest in this poem. But you go with what you are comfortable with.

  5. Barbara Horter says:

    Your art and writing talent is amazing…I love the portrait…looks like you…I enjoy all your posts and am always glad when I see your name…

    • irinadim says:

      Barbara, thank you so much for your kind and encouraging comment. This is a portrait of a young male model from a magazine. His extraordinary beauty inspired me to write this poem.

  6. irinadim says:

    Benita, I started off with “winter” without the possessive, but then it sounded like “winter” is doing the wrinkling, so I opted for the possessive. Your new suggestion sounds great without the comma – “winter wrinkles wink and grin”. How about that? I think I can now make those changes. I just need your Amen! 🙂

    • irinadim says:

      I’m taking out the possessive! I had a look in my file on the computer and that’s what I had at first, the possessive was an after-thought. So out it goes! Thanks very much for your constructive feedback, Benita. 🙂

      • Benita Kape says:

        I think it works very well. It’s lovely. It’s amazing how often our first thoughts were the best. Pat, my husband, was great at giving comment on my writing and he was not a writer, just better at spelling then me, and he always used to say to me ‘don’t change it’. It depends, doesn’t it?

      • irinadim says:

        I also give my husband Sasha to read everything I write, and although his English is not perfect, he can still give me valuable feedback regarding the mood and logical sequence of the piece. Thanks for your Amen, Benita. 🙂 Much appreciated.

  7. vhosking says:

    Shouldn’t it be winter wrinkles, winks and grins? If you are listing descriptive verbs for winter, you need to keep subject/verb agreement.

    • irinadim says:

      Yes, that would be correct if I wanted “winter” to be the subject, but, actually, my intention was to have “winter wrinkles” as a subject, that’s why I added the apostrophe to make it clearer, but after discussing it with Benita, I took it out again.

  8. Beautiful words to accompany your drawing. How wonderful that you can create both words and visual portraits. xx

  9. Renard Moreau says:

    [ Smiles ] You are a very talented artist!

  10. Aquileana says:

    Irina, your drawing is outstanding… And so are Your words…

    “Beauty & Vanity” , that title reminded me of “Pride & Prejudice”…

    Cheers, Aquileana 😉

  11. Irina, your poem and picture are a wonderful set. You really have mastered how to draw a face so lifelike. My daughter and I think it looks like my youngest son. I love the dimpled chin – just like my son’s…

    Blessings ~ Wendy

  12. irinadim says:

    Oh Wendy, your son is then a very handsome young man. Thank you very much for your lovely comment. 🙂

  13. Fantastic drawing! A great expression, and I’d say that drawing is your strength.

  14. irinadim says:

    Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting. Much appreciated. 🙂 Cheers!

  15. sf says:

    What an excellent drawing! Goodness, you’re not only a poet, but also a photographer AND artist?! So many talents!!! Your life must be so HD – 3D colorfully bright everyday! p.s. That’s interesting that the poem is about vanity cuz that fella sure does look handsome!

  16. irinadim says:

    Thanks for appreciating my talents, sf. I wish I had more time for painting and drawing. But taking a photo is so much quicker! You’re right, the beauty of that young fella made me think about ‘passing beauty’ and with it also ‘passing vanity’.

  17. Aw love this….Im winking and proud of my wrinkles… I earned them ( smiles)

  18. irinadim says:

    And the fringe suits you!

  19. Whimsical and wry
    I hear the kookaburra’s cry
    A woman’s wisdom dry
    And resonate “Oh my!”

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