Window
This abstract oil painting I painted many years ago, entitled Window, inspired the poem I wrote last year. It’s 92 x 70 cm and hangs on the wall facing the entry, its bright colours even brighter in the morning sunshine. It’s signed IKA , my nickname.
Window
Into the past
Remote control
Fast roll
Roll, roll the barrel
On parade
Khaki apparel
Guns and men
Of great renown
I want the smiling clown
Window…
Past and present intertwined
Some stories much maligned
No, that wasn’t so
What do you know?
I remember well
Sometimes ‘twas worse than hell
Now the music’s fine
In your arms divine
Window…
There’s not much left
For you and me
Colours sinking soon
Into Eternity
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© irina dimitric 2013
Irina's Poetry Corner 
Mmm. I’m liking this one, how it flows through my mind as I read it. And the painting is divine! I’d love to own a print if not the original!
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, Susan.
I absolutely love your painting! 🙂
I ditto that.
Thanks to you both. Your encouragement is much appreciated.
🙂
Nice painting to go with a soothing verse.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
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Here is Irina’s response to this week’s WE Sunday prompt.
Love the painting! The poem definitely has some music in it. Feels like tumbling verse to me. Thank you for sharing this!
Did you consciously use any of the rhetorical devices we talked about? Repeating the word “Window” feels less like anaphora and more like a litany, but it’s wonderfully effective, adding rhythm and unity.
I see one we didn’t mention yet. The device of repeating the end of a phrase at the beginning of the next one
Fast roll
Roll, roll the barrel
is called anadiplosis. And the device of repeating a word immediately (“Roll, roll the barrel”) is epizeuxis. Well done!
Doug
Yes, it turned out as tumbling verse because wordpress wouldn’t obey my instructions to separate it into three stanzas, but it turns out that I like it better like this.
This poem was written last year, so I didn’t know about these devices then. Obviously, I need to have a second look at anaphora. I’m glad you found two new devices in my poem.
Thank you, Doug, for your generous comment and I’m very happy you’re pleased with my contribution.
Cheers 🙂 Irina
When I clicked on Writing Essential Group, I got “Page not found!”
Try copying and pasting to this: http://writingessentialgroup.com/
Thanks Pam, I went to http://writingessentialgroup.com/ but there’s no SunWinks there.
If you scroll down past that challenge, you’ll see prior challenges. SunWinks is linked there.
Pam, this is all I found:
Categories
•Monday Writing Essential
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And there is no Sunday Writing Essential or SunWinks.
All those you listed should be links to the challenges.
Thanks, Pam. I tried again and this time found Doug’s page where he’d already posted my link. Now I need to check out other entries for other days. The link he posted above still doesn’t lead anywhere. So thank you for the link you’ve provided.
You’re welcome. I’m still learning how to navigate here, so I’m glad I actually was helpful.
🙂
Love the painting and the poem.
Thank you so much, Sharon.
The poem fits the painting well. Wonderfully done on both..
Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
Beautiful sentiment,present ,past ,and the vision.JMS
Thank you, Jalal. I appreciate your lovely comment.
Love the poem, Irina. (Alice G.)
Thank you so much, Alice.
Gorgeous ! I<3 the poem
Have a nive day !
I love ♥
Nice day to you too ❤
Thank you, Lucia. I’m so glad you like it.
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“Window…/ There’s not much left / For you and me”…
What a wonderful poem, dear Irina…
Very touching and highly evocative…
Thanks for sharing…
Best regards and wishing you a nice weekend ahead,
Aquileana 😀
Thanks so much for your beautiful words, Aquileana.
It’s Tuesday today so I wish you a great week. 🙂 Irina
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Lovely painting and fun ode to windows, passages and time.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment.