Hibiscus aglow
Aglow bright red
With the setting sun
Glowing bright red
In the Garden of Love
Like the Maiden’s
Ripe lips
Lips ripe with
Glowing love
The young Dreamer
Yearns to kiss
*
© Irina Dimitric 2014.
Hibiscus aglow
Aglow bright red
With the setting sun
Glowing bright red
In the Garden of Love
Like the Maiden’s
Ripe lips
Lips ripe with
Glowing love
The young Dreamer
Yearns to kiss
*
© Irina Dimitric 2014.
Wonderful! You see how that added rhythm to your poem? You’re my star pupil!
Yes, it did, but it didn’t just happen. I worked on it and worked on it bearing in mind your examples and reading it out aloud until I got it right. And now I’m aglow with happiness at your lovely comment. Thanks, Doug 🙂
Yesssssss! Reading it aloud is one of the most important things to do when writing poetry. Good work! 😀
Thanks, Doug. 🙂
Doug, you are such a show off. 😛 How did you get the laughing face?
You did a great job. Nice. Lovely flower.
Thanks, Sharon. 🙂
I love the internal rhyme sounds. It flows beautifully!
Jan
Thanks, Jan. 🙂
It is lovely.
Thanks, Pam. 🙂
This is absolutely beautiful, iriadim and I can tell this took a lot of work, as it came out wonderfully – a word painter you are and the photo is gorgeous!
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Oops. I ought to spell your name correctly, so sorry, let’s try that again:
irinadim – that’s better!
Thanks, Kat, (may I call you Kat?) for your lovely comment. My first name is Irina. Cheers 🙂