First a flutter in the chest
Then a thudding
Elephants stampeding
Through the savannah
Sudden drought
In the throat
Words freeze
On the useless tongue
Gasping for air
She turns into
A statue
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Ah…you’ve caught me in your net…wondering what turned her it was that turned her to stone….!
I mean what it was that turned her into stone….
I don’t know, Jan. The prompt was to describe the meaning of an abstract word without mentioning that word in the poem.
Poe would be proud. Of this. You surprised me. Very cool. Hugs, Barbara
Thank you so much, Barbara, for suggesting Poe would be proud of me. You made my day! Hugs, Irina
Irina, I don’t think you ever fail with Doug’s challenges. Bravo.
Actually, I did with this one! He liked the poem, but it didn’t meet the challenge. Click on SunWinks! link above, it’s all there. It serves me right for putting in ‘critique welcome’. My head is still spinning! 🙂
Ohhh the end is surprising and… I like it!
She could have started to run, but she was immobilised by fear. I didn’t meet the challenge although Doug liked the poem. If you want to see Doug’s comments, click on his link at the bottom of this post.
Very nice version… My favorite verses here are: ” Words freeze/On the useless tongue
Gasping for air/She turns into/A statue”… Such a merciless ending resolution!.
Love, dear Irina ❤ Aquileana 😀
That’s the first version. Doug liked the poem, but I didn’t meet the challenge, so I wrote the second version, which was a bit better, and finally the third version met the challenge.
If you’re interested, you can click on the link at the end of the post. You’ll see there our conversation and Doug’s expert mentoring. I mentioned him in the Preface in my book.
Happy week! Cheers 🙂 Irina
Sounds interesting… I’ll definitely take a peek dear Irina ⭐ All the best to you, always, Aquileana 😛
Hugs ❤ Irina