Angry wasps
Fill my ears
Wildebeests stampede
Through the savannah
Lions and cheetahs
Ready to pounce
Parched earth
Ready to swallow me
Burning trees
Ready to embrace me
Hungry vultures
Descend
Gasping for air
I turn into
A stump!
Copyright © 2014 Irina Dimitric
For anyone interested to know why I’m posting a third version, please click on the link below. Doug Westberg is a fine mentor.
http://dougwestberg.wordpress.com/2014/10/18/sunwinks-october-19-2014-i-never-metaphor-part-ii/comment-page-1/#comment-477
About irinadim
Kookaburra sweet,
you neither chirp nor tweet.
Your laughter is much like mine,
my cackle is much like thine.
We are two sister souls,
one clad in feathers,
the other in clothes.
~ Irina ~
I’m a budding blogger. Poetry and photography are my newest passions, living in perfect harmony inspiring each other. I like both free verse and form poetry and am quite proud to let you know that I am the creator of a new form named ‘tercetonine’.
Blog Name: Irina's Poetry Corner
Blog URL: http://irinadim.com
Irina's Poetry Corner 
I love it! Well done!
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Thank you, Doug. I truly appreciate your mentoring.
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Well said!
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Thanks, Ashok.
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Good, and unexpected ending result. Like it.
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Thanks, Sharon. I’m glad you like it.
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Powerful.. Great poetic images and descriptive effect achieved through adjectives!… Very well penned as always dear irina ❤ Sending you hugs!, Aquileana 😛
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Thanks, Aquileana. The third version is the result of Doug Westberg’s mentoring. I’m very happy with it and so is he. I’m glad you like it, too.
Happy week! Hugs ❤ Irina
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